Comment on Undertale Purple - Perseverance

  1. AnonymousWriter08 on Chapter 10 Thu 11 Sep 2025 04:16AM UTC

    "Ah shit, here we go again." Mari in heaven, probably LOL

    BTW, I saw a comment you made on a previous chapter, glad you are liking the story!
    What do you think about it?
    Have any tips that might make it better?

    (If it seems a bit OOC, sorry... it's my 1st time writing a fanfic on... anything, really. If you have any tips regarding Faraway, the friend group, basil, sunny, or mari's writing, please let me know! I'm not as familiar with Omori as I am with Undertale (I haven't played Omori yet, but I saw a LOT of videos, I read the whole story and saw every ending, read A LOT of fanfics of Omori here in Ao3, and even investigated in the wiki for as many info as possible, so it makes enough sense)

     

    Have a good night!

    Last Edited Thu 11 Sep 2025 04:25AM UTC

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    1. Tuangaming86 on Chapter 10 Thu 11 Sep 2025 01:34PM UTC

      For the friend reacting to the news, why all of them just lashed out on Sunny, at least Hero and Aubrey is understandable but why Kel ?

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      1. AnonymousWriter08 on Chapter 10 Thu 11 Sep 2025 05:25PM UTC

        Well... I had an explanation, but it's pretty shitty

        Basically, thanks to Sunny:
        - Aubrey lost the only support she had and ended as a delinquent
        - Basil ended up being traumatized and was the victim of Aubrey (I know it doesn't make much sense that the friend group is just mad at Basil but ended up lashing at Sunny despite Basil making everything WAY worse, but... they will see how much they fucked in the future)
        - Hero ended up depressed a WHOLE year, and lashed out at Kel

         

        Kel ended up lashing at Sunny because... he felt like Sunny tricked them and left them to suffer, making them all believe a lie that led to the group fragmenting (he is mostly pissed because Hero ended up so broken, and because he felt like an idiot waiting for Sunny to leave all this time, just to discover that Sunny was who ruined it all)
        But... honestly... for the story to work... I had to make the group be pissed with Sunny (because... being honest... if the friend group forgave Sunny, I don't believe he reasonably would have wanted to jump into the Underground)

        Sorry if my explanation is poor. English is not my native language (in case of the writing being a bit weird), and I needed to make the reason as to why Sunny went to Ebott have sense)

        And don't worry... they all will get some slaps of common sense in future chapters.

        But... in general... you like it?
        Do you see other mistakes I should correct?
        I'm open to suggestions

        Have a good afternoon!

        Last Edited Thu 11 Sep 2025 05:25PM UTC

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        1. Tuangaming86 on Chapter 10 Fri 12 Sep 2025 03:31AM UTC

          hmmm also Chara, Clover and Frisk appear in the tag. Are they have purpose for this story ?

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          1. AnonymousWriter08 on Chapter 10 Fri 12 Sep 2025 04:22AM UTC

            They will... in future chapters

            But, overall, do you like it?
            Do you have any tips as to how to handle the Faraway Gang?

            Have a good night!

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